We've also been asked to take them to a fortune teller. This is where today's post comes in. I thought that I'd share the piece I wrote when one of my characters visited a fortune teller. This may or may not make it through the editing process (assuming I ever get that far!) but it was an interesting piece to write. Some background to set the scene: in the novel there is a man, George, who has relationships with two women, Sally and Jemma. These relationships are polar opposites - one fiery and passionate, one steady and calm. George has to decide which he wants and the rejected woman takes it very badly. No spoilers so I won't tell you what she does or even who she is but there's some lovely writing to come as she takes her revenge! So here's what happens when Sally popped in to see a fortune teller.
Sally opened the door and parted the curtain that was draped
across the doorway. A few candles and tea lights were gamely trying to add
atmosphere to what was, essentially, the back room of a pub. There was a table
in one corner with the usual tools of the fortune tellers trade arranged neatly
on it: crystal ball, two packs of cards, one standard and one tarot. The gin
was warming through her and she stifled a giggle as she looked round the room.
There were two chairs facing each other tucked under the table. Sally pulled
one out. It scraped across the wooden floor and she sat down to wait for
whatever was going to happen.
She imagined a stooped figure swathed in shawls, heavy gold
jewellery and dangling earrings. She’d have a rich voice with a trace of an
Eastern European accent. Madam Arcati from Blithe Spirit sprang to mind. Sally
closed her eyes and imagined how the reading would go. The fortune teller would
gaze into the crystal ball and reveal her future. She’d tell her all about her
success as an actress, the awards she’d win and her love life, especially her
love life. Sally had a romantic view of what the fortune teller would say and
the emphasis was on ‘romance’. She sighed as she thought about what would be
revealed about her and George, the way they were destined to be together
despite his straying lately.
Her reveries were interrupted by a creaking door and she
opened her eyes to see a tall rather gangly young man standing behind the chair
opposite her. He smiled and sat down. Sally looked around the room to see if
anyone else was there, maybe someone who would explain what was going on.
‘I’m sorry,’ she said, ’I think you may be in the wrong
room. I’m waiting to have a reading and the fortune teller will be here soon.
You’d better wait outside until we’re finished.’ She flashed her most brilliant
smile and turned away from him.
‘Great! I’m Nigel, the fortune teller. I’ll be doing your
reading today.’
Sally turned back towards him and forced her mouth to stay
shut. This couldn’t be right. Who’d ever heard of a fortune teller called
Nigel?
‘Do you have a preference?’ Nigel asked, indicating the items
on the table.
Sally shook her head. This was disappointing. Nothing about
this filled her with hope and she felt herself sobering up rapidly.
‘I’m not sure. I’ve never done this before. Well, there was
the school fete when I was 14 but I don’t think the Geography teacher had the
gift, if you know what I mean.’
Nigel steepled his hands together and his head nodded
enthusiastically as Sally spoke.
‘In that case, may I recommend having your palm read? I’m
very skilled in that area and most first timers find it most revealing.’
Sally struggled not to giggle when he said he was skilled in
that area. She nodded and held out her hand.
‘Both hands please.’ Nigel said, his voice lowering in tone
and volume.
She reached across the table and he took her hands in his,
turning them palms up and closing his eyes. A few moments of quiet and steady
breathing followed and Sally waited patiently.
‘This one is the dominant hand,’ Nigel said lifting her
right hand gently. She placed her left hand on the table and waited.
‘What do you want to know?’ he asked. ‘Work, health, love?
The choice is yours.’
‘Love.’ Sally said firmly. ‘Tell me about love.’
Nigel stared at her palm with such intensity that Sally
started to feel uncomfortably warm, then hot. As an actress she was used to
people looking at her but this level of personal scrutiny was something she
rarely encountered. She became acutely aware of ever sound in the room: the
door creaking in the breeze, someone walking past, a distant clock. But above
all their breathing. The only other time Sally recalled being aware of
someone’s breathing was when she was having sex. This was different and made
her uncomfortable. It was intimate in a different way and she had no idea how
she felt about it.
‘You have a very complicated love line. It is long, twisted
and broken in places. This indicates that nothing is simple when it comes to
love for you. You have loved deeply, very deeply but I sense disappointment in
love. There is someone who you loved more than they loved you. You have lost
them recently. Not lost to death but lost to another.’
Sally felt her mouth swinging open as Nigel spoke. How did
he know this? It was as if he’d peeped into her life. All she could do was nod
and swallow.
‘He’s not for you. He’s moved on and is beyond your grasp.
Forget him. That part of your life is over. You aren’t ready to move on yet but
you will be soon. Broken hearts mend eventually.’
Sally snatched her hand away. This was not what she had come
to hear. She needed to hear that George would return to her, that she was the
love of his life and he would see the error of his ways.
‘No!’ she shouted, ‘That’s not true. Look again, you’re
wrong. He needs me, loves me and will come back to me. Use the cards. They’ll
tell you.’
Nigel looked sadly at her and shook his head.
‘I’m sorry that you don’t like the reading but I can only
tell you what I see.’
‘No!’ she shouted at him again, ‘This is a set up, you’re in
it with him, aren’t you? How could I have been so stupid? Of course this is all
a joke to you. I can see you both laughing as you plotted to humiliate me.
Well, it won’t work. I’ll find a way to get him back!’
She stood up suddenly and sent the chair clattering to the
floor. Nigel remained seated, pale and worried as she ranted. He managed to
save the crystal ball when she swept everything from the table but the cards
scattered across the floor. Sally stormed towards the door, opened it then
turned back towards him. He clutched the crystal ball to his chest and held his
breath.
‘You can tell George that I saw through your little ruse.
Tell him that I’ll never give him up. Especially not to that nonentity he’s
seeing at the moment!’
The door slammed behind her and Nigel waited a few moments
before he felt it was safe to breathe again. That was not how his readings
usually ended. He popped the crystal ball into his jacket pocket and headed to
the bar, shaking slightly.
A slightly longer post than I ususally do but I hope you enjoyed reading it. Do let me know what you think!
Also let me know if you'd like me to post anymore little bits like this from the course.
Here's a link to the course if you want to know more:
https://thepigeonhole.com/books/52-dates-for-writers
Really enjoyed this scene - your writing flows so well. I would love to read more of these characters - could also imagine a series of stories as told by Nigel - interlocking tales of the people who visit him as story teller. Perhaps this could be a second project?!
ReplyDeleteThank you for that lovely comment Claire. I also love the idea of developing something with Nigel - I can imagine all sorts of kooky people visiting him!
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